amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 2 months ago

    Prologue
    Travers lay on the field, blood from his wound staining his clothes red. Travers lay there dying, his sword a few feet away. His brother walked towards him, pulling his blood-stained sword from Travers’ gut. As the sword was lifted towards his face, Travers caught sight of the jewel. That was it, that was the jewel that would end the…[Read more]

        amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        I also don’t have a phone, so i couldn’t write stories on a mobile device

        angelectra replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        Hello!

        I decided I was bored and had too much freetime on my hands, so I was like, “Hey, why don’t I try editing this person’s story.” Sorry if I’m being annoying! You can always just ignore me.

        Well, here’s the (long) revision & explanation:

        You probably shouldn’t start two consecutive sentences using the same word. It can sound awkward and d…[Read more]

          angelectra replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          Ah I just realized this revision sounded awkward:

          “He lay there as he felt his limbs grow heavier as the life drained out of him, with his sword just out of reach.”

          It would be better to write

          “He lay there as he felt his limbs grow heavier due to the life draining out of him, with his sword just out of reach.”

          Sorry about that. Hmm… somethi…[Read more]

          hahahahahahahahaiamanever replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          WOW! Mind editing my story too? Click on my avatar then ACTIVITY.

        angelectra replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        Lol when I saw the part about you asking for constructive criticism and not stuff like “YOU SUCK”, you have no idea how tempted I was to just type “YOU SUCK” just for the fun of it.

          amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          Thanks, I used “Grammarly” So I guess it didn’t pick it up lol

        angelectra replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        Hmm, well theoretically your sentences WERE gramatically correct, so grammarly wouldn’t have picked it up. It’s better to have a real person check over whether the writing flows or doesn’t sound awkward and repetitive. If you have a friend who is good at writing, then maybe you could ask them to read over your work.

          amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          Yeah, but thanks anyway for the rewrite lol

        amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        I WILL! Yeah, I just keep on rewriting the story, don’t I lol!

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 8 months ago

    Prologue

    Travers woke in a start, sweating furiously. He may have found his Princess and gotten his happy ending, but his story was far from over. In a flash of bright light his soul was transferred to the newborn soul of a newborn babe. Travers fell into the arms of death. His old, brittle arms snapped under the pressure of his graying body…[Read more]

        polabear11 replied 2 years, 8 months ago

        Tag me please! Oh wait I’m already in the list. Haven’t seen you in a while! I’m writing a story about Paige and Nolan in middle school. Except Nolan acts like a stupid normal preteen boy.

          polabear11 replied 2 years, 8 months ago

          Which he is irl. Once we got to middle school, he started ignoring me completely. Boys.

        inlovewithbooks replied 2 years, 8 months ago

        tag me PLS

        fsa161 replied 2 years, 8 months ago

        Amazing!! Loved it so much!!!!!! 🙂

          amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 8 months ago

          Thank you all!!!! (I have been having writer’s block, which is why I haven’t been on here!!) And sure @inlovewithbooks

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 9 months ago

    I am sorry I haven’t been on here for a while. But I’m thinking of discontinuing my story…… I just can’t think of anything to write.. Sowwy to the people who liked it…. 🙁

    Tag List:
    @POLABEAR11
    @AGATHA3
    @EVILERRULER845
    @DOT111
    @LAURA22
    @CARAMELPRINCESS
    @MISTELLA
    @LUNA101
    @ROTTENAPPLE
    @OTAKU88
    @FSA161
    @SMARTCLEVERBUNNY560

        smartcleverbunny560 replied 2 years, 9 months ago

        What?? Noooooooooo!!!!

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 11 months ago

    I have writer’s block, can anyone help me with what to next with chapter 2 rewrite?? Just put suggestions!!
    Tag List: (BTW, if I missed someone please notify me!)
    @POLABEAR11
    @AGATHA3
    @EVILERRULER845
    @DOT111
    @LAURA22
    @CARAMELPRINCESS
    @MISTELLA
    @LUNA101
    @ROTTENAPPLE
    @OTAKU88
    @FSA161
    @SMARTCLEVERBUNNY560

        doveys-apprentice replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        you could:
        introduce a new character
        kill someone (im evil 2day) 😀
        introduce a new villian
        make new friends
        go on an adventure
        describe a class
        hope this helps!
        @doveys-apprentice

        toffee replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Learn some surprising news.
        Have a dream (nemesis or other)
        Have a falling out with a character
        Fast forward to Trial by Tale, the Circus of Talents or the Snow/No Ball

        pugsforever replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Can you tag me please? Great job 🙂

        demonicever replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Have you had any ideas related to other stuff, or a shocking fate of a character?

          amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 11 months ago

          I know that the eldest brother will become Keeper of the Storian, while his brother watches over the Fairytales

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 11 months ago
        fairytalegirl123 replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Which one? The first one ItsMeJazzy started?
        Also, @clareofendlesswoods left the site, sorry…

          amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 11 months ago

          Yeah, the one @itsmejazzy started

        amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Cause, we just like finished the prologue. and then stopped. I really liked it.

        amigoodorevil replied 2 years, 11 months ago

        Sure…. what is it about???

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 12 months ago

    Chapter 1

    A few dings came from the lone grandfather clock in his rather empty room. His room consisted of the following things: A grandfather clock, an antique dresser, a polished mirror above the dresser, a door that led to his balcony, another door that led into a rather large closet, and an exquisite bed. It wasn’t as much as his o…[Read more]

        otaku88 replied 2 years, 12 months ago

        Chapter one restart.

        I’m…ambivalent. The descriptions are….okay? But it sounds like info dumps. Like the describing of the bedroom, we didn’t need that. Or the girl’s name, we didn’t need that. And it sounds really…..idk….forced? Overall, it was okay? Sorry if I’m not helping, I couldn’t put my finger on what was wrong.
        (P.S is your…[Read more]

        moonchild9 replied 2 years, 12 months ago

        You did a good job. I like it.

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 3 years ago

    Prolouge

    The wind rustled his dark hair, and a smile grew on his tan face. He whooped, and whistled to his heart’s content.A few tweets and roars came from the forest behind him Run, Run! They cried, Run far away and never come back! Travers stopped whistling and slowed down. He gave an inquisitive chirp and a few tweets from a dove f…[Read more]

        bluemoon321 replied 3 years ago

        Thats amazing!

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years ago

          Thank you, do you want to be tagged?????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

        dot111 replied 3 years ago

        Renewal.
        Cool start!! Thanks for tagging me! 🙂

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years ago

          I was just re-writing the chapters!!!!!! It isn’t a new book or anything!!!!

        fsa161 replied 3 years ago

        AMAZING! LOVE IT! Great job!!! 🙂 Thanks for tagging me!

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years ago

          Thanks!

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 3 years ago

    Hey guys. Since for the updated bios I have done Travers Cassius and Emilia, now it is time for Lana Charming! Hope you like it!!
    Name: Alana Flora Charming (Alana: Precious Flora: Flower Charming: Pleasant)
    Nickname: Lana
    Gender: Female
    Age: 13
    Siblings: A 16-year-old sister named Hope
    Homeland: Her homeland is The Charming Kingdom where she…[Read more]

        cbr10 replied 3 years ago

        Lana is going to die. I’m getting goosebumps that was so good!

          thehplayer replied 3 years ago

          Lana is going to die very nice bio are you making stories about characters in your bio?

        amigoodorevil replied 3 years ago

        I know, I have been swept away by Schoolwork and Homework!!! But in my spare time (Like 15 minutes) I have been working on this!!!!!!

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 3 years, 5 months ago

    ey Guys!!!! Since I did the updates of Travers and Cassius already I decided to do an updated on all MY characters (Because it would be weird if I did it with other people’s characters) Let’s Go!!!
    First, we are starting off with……

    DRUMROLL PLEASE!!!!!!!

    EMILIA!!!!!
    Name: Emilia Ailene Trelawney of Delbrück (First name: To Imitate Middle n…[Read more]

        dot111 replied 3 years, 5 months ago

        Emilia is cursed.
        Great bio!,

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 5 months ago

          Thanks!!

        smartcleverbunny560 replied 3 years, 5 months ago

        Emilia is cursed. Nice!

        luna101 replied 3 years, 5 months ago

        Emilia is cursed. Awesome!

        laura1311 replied 3 years, 5 months ago

        The spiral of grief… is that depression?

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 5 months ago

          Yep

        caramelprincess replied 3 years, 5 months ago

        Emilia is cursed. Ooh really good character!

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 5 months ago

          Thanks (BTW this isn’t a new character it is just updated)

    amigoodorevil posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 3 years, 6 months ago

    Hey Guys!!! Today’s post is an updated bio of Cassius, Travers’ brother!!! Let’s go!!!!
    Name: Cassius Frances Bellerose of Enchantresa (His homeland before moving to Arron Woods)
    Nickname: Cassie
    Gender: Male
    Age: 12 ½
    Siblings: An older twin brother named Travers Francis Bellerose (In Good), and a younger half-sister named Madeline Victor…[Read more]

        smartcleverbunny560 replied 3 years, 6 months ago

        Travers is blesses. Great job! Loved his bio!

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 6 months ago

          Blesses???

          smartcleverbunny560 replied 3 years, 6 months ago

          Sorry *blessed. I was typing that on my kindle fire and my fingers always slip up on there…

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 6 months ago

          That is okay!!!

        fsa161 replied 3 years, 6 months ago

        Travers is blessed

        Awesome job!!! (Also thank you. :))

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 6 months ago

          For what!!!

        fsa161 replied 3 years, 6 months ago

        Oh, you said that after you updated Cassius bio, that I can use him in my story. ; . (Sorry, I didn’t tell you that earlier. I was at school and the teacher didn’t know I was in the website so I was typing fast)

          amigoodorevil replied 3 years, 6 months ago

          Oh I just didn’t realize what you meant =!!!

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