hi here is the rest of my last chapter here goes nothing.
Arics pov 2:
why couldn’t it have been someone else? y can’t the school master or even hort or sophie be the other dean, In fact it would be almost as good if one of them took my place as dean instead. ” Manley get ur **** face out of my sight” ‘Geez calm down mom calm down”
thats all…[Read more]
This is great! I don’t usually give constructive criticism, but since you asked, stray away from using ‘text talk’ as my teacher put it, create a new line when someone is speaking, use a variation of full stops, commas, etc, use apostrophes for someone’s POV, and try to use more capital letters. Other than that, as I said, it was great!
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I think that I should start again with Arics pov but from another part of book 3
I have to be Dean of New typical!
And just when i thought life couldn’t get any worse i was told who my partnering Dean was going to be guess who … Yep Lady Leonora Lesso AKA Mom yeah i know its a surprise that one of the best Deans of Evil ( wait…[Read more]
Soz about stopping in the middle of a sentence but I had to go and help my sister get ready any way
I said “it was milky & blury but it had purple violet eyes like urs and a black sharp shouldered gown with black steel heeled leather boots also like urs
actually I think it was u” and just like that I had told my mother that she was my NEM…[Read more]
Hiya again I’m gonna try the rest of my chapter so let’s get to it
Chapter 1 part2
I told my mother what I had dreamt about and she went whiter then a sheet whiter then I
Had ever seen her go and trust me she has gone real white be4 when I asked her what was wrong she just said aric love who did u see?
hi im gonna try to write my 1 chapter which is gonna be hard here goes nothing
I HAD BEEN ON MY OWN FOR OVER 10 YEARS NOW ONLY SEEING MY MOTHER ONCE A DAY SOME TIMES EVEN LESS, WHEN ONE NIGHT I HAD A DREAM :IWAS PLAYING IN THE WOODS LIKE ALWAYS WHEN I SAW A WOMAN WITH RABBIT LIKE NOW I COME TO THINK ABOUT IT SHE LOOKED A…[Read more]
um… could use some fine tuning. A nice start though. I can give u some tips though. Tag me! @rickytabs
:D!!!!!!!!!! Hi!!!! This sounds pretty good! Can you tag me too?
I love that you used Aric! He is a curious charecter. Arbed house, snake!? So much going on with him
Good try adding commas and apostrophes but it is really good tag me maybe read mine I like that little cliffhanger
Hi do any of you have any ideas on wat I should do first