crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 week, 5 days ago

    I really don’t know what to do with this. I have no idea if this even is a story anyone would want to read but I would really love to hear peoples opinions on this. So please comment and do tell me if it’s terrible, I would rather know

    A seagull flies high and free against a blazing blue sky, the camera following the intricate loops and dives as…[Read more]

        jellyfish-syllia replied 1 week, 5 days ago

        OOOF HIT ME RIGHT IN THE FEELS

        evilerruler845 replied 1 week, 5 days ago

        it’s vv good, esp the descriptions!! my personal preference tho would be to give the excerpt a bit of a more solid ending? idk but you kinda left us hanging there in a way that’s not a cliffhanger and not an actual ending there imo..

          crowwolfmoon replied 1 week, 4 days ago

          i know this was a very unfinished story, I really don’t know where to take it tough, what do you think?

          evilerruler845 replied 1 week, 4 days ago

          write abt the boy? what caused him to cry? why’d he cry there? how’d he even get there? and the description of the roof made me think of sci-fi tho that might not be it.

        raynaevil809 replied 1 week, 4 days ago

        oh wow!

        nadea replied 1 week ago

        The beginning made me think it was during some sort of apocalypse, so perhaps he’s grieving the loss of multiple people and not just one? And he’s kinda in despair?

        But at the same time he could just be lonely, or upset at something, or grieving a loss like you said. There’s honestly so many directions you could take this.

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 months, 2 weeks ago

    Once

    She towered over the world
    Her branches covered the sky,
    Her roots spanning continents

    Half the world lived in her canopy
    They were born, lived and died, in the blink of an eye

    She remained

    Now

    Her branches hang sick and dying,
    Metal wires criss-cross the sky were they once proudly stood.
    The ground where her roots once snaked…[Read more]

        geek replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        Wow, this is really good. Tag me if you do more!

        evilerruler845 replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        Es hermoso <3 it's vv good. question: will it be just poetry the whole time or will you write an actual story abt it?

          crowwolfmoon replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          Just a poem. I don’t really see how I could make a story out of it

        hester112 replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        It’s really good! please tag.

        carrot123 replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Great job! Tag me!

        rylletezzy replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Oh it’s good! Is this a story or just a some kind of uuhh.. Poetry?

          carrot123 replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          It’s poetry

        carrot123 replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        But you can put poetry on here

          rylletezzy replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          Oohhhh I see… Ok.. Tag me!!

        evisla123 replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Please tag me 💜 I can’t think of any criticism except for the miss spelling of where. It was really good!!!

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 10 months ago

    A prayer in the darkness
    A stumble in the night
    The hurried talk of hunted men
    Dark eyes shining bright
    A blacked hand
    A watchful eye
    A clink of hidden coins
    A creaking wheel
    A bowed mare
    A silence settling back

    Constructive Critism please
    @nehaj888
    @cocoofwoodsbeyond
    @thewitchyone
    @nadea

        fsa161 replied 1 year, 10 months ago

        This looks awesome!!! 🙂 Is this the prologue?

          fsa161 replied 1 year, 10 months ago

          If so, you did an awesome job! 🙂

          crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 10 months ago

          No, not a prolouge. Just a poem I came up with to procrastanate on french homework. Thanks for calling it awesome

        fsa161 replied 1 year, 10 months ago

        You’re welcome!!! Should make a story out of it though? It would be great. ^_^

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 10 months ago

    Wonderland was dangerous
    Death lay in every step

    Jabberwockies walked abroad
    The Queen’s command was met

    The hatter giggled madly
    As each party guest was slain

    And for all who saw the cheshire grin
    Their end was laced with pain

    Then Alice came to wonderland
    And Wonderland was changed

    The vorpal sword killed the winged death
    And the code o…[Read more]

        olivia340 replied 1 year, 10 months ago

        This is awesome!!

          crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 10 months ago

          thanks

        crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 10 months ago
          ilovesophie21 replied 1 year, 10 months ago

          you are such a good poet.

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 10 months ago

    The words on the page blurred in front of her as a single tear rolled down her cheek. She stood quietly for a moment, the small black book clutched in her hands, before carefully handing it over to person standing in front of her.

    She could see the old man’s hands shaking as he reached out for the book, could almost taste the hope in the air as t…[Read more]

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    This is a poem so I don’t really know if i counts but here goes

    Alice wanted Wonderland
    to capture and to cage

    Alice wanted Wonderland
    To sit meekly on a page

    Alice wanted Wonderland
    To order and enslave

    Alice wanted Wonderland
    To look at when she craved

    But Wonderland is dangerous
    It turned her pretty head

    Now Alice wears a blood stained…[Read more]

        crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 11 months ago
        nadea replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Oh, wow. This is beautiful & riveting & scary at the same time. THIS. IS. SO. DEEP!!

          crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 11 months ago

          Thanks

        crowwolfmoon replied 1 year, 11 months ago
    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 1 month ago

    The door slammed shut, sealing Levi in to her fate. Huge broken sobs shook her body as the Blue fairy walked away

    She stayed curled up against the wall for hours, her sobs slowly receding. After a while, her sobs stopped, making it easier for her enhanced ears to listen to the quiet breathing on the other side. She waited. The guard shifted,…[Read more]

        evilerruler845 replied 2 years, 1 month ago

        Cool!! I don’t know what chapter this is, so it’d help if you do that. It’s very intriguing, though. Very nice job! 🙂

          crowwolfmoon replied 2 years, 1 month ago

          Thank’s

        thewitchyone replied 2 years, 1 month ago

        tag me plz

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 2 months ago

    The six year old screamed, her face flushed with tears,
    The darkness at the edge of the bed shifted, just a little
    Sobs wracked the child’s body as two gleaming eyes appeared out of the darkness
    It seethed in the shadow of the bed, waiting for it’s chance
    And soon it came,
    The child shifted, moving so that her hand hung over the edge of the…[Read more]

        crowwolfmoon replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        Constructive Criticism, please
        oh and @nadea

        polabear11 replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        This is great! Keep writing!
        -PolaBear11

          crowwolfmoon replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          Thanks

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 2 months ago

    Alex ran crying from Hero Training, her arms and legs ached from multiple bruises and her skin felt tender where the scars had not properly healed. Her bare feet pounded across concrete, the hard surface tearing of newly grown skin leaving her feet coated in blood. The concrete gave way to grass as a fresh wave of tears blinded her. Her energy…[Read more]

        crowwolfmoon replied 2 years, 2 months ago

        Constructive Criticism, please

          nadea replied 2 years, 2 months ago

          This is really interesting! Could you, next time, please indent every time someone says something or something new happens? But, this is really cool!! Please tag me!

    crowwolfmoon posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 years, 3 months ago

    I can’t seem to tag anymore. Does anyone know why that might have happened

        evelynrose replied 2 years, 3 months ago

        Hi there. To tag someone, you have to write @ and then add there username. For example if someone tagged me it would be @evelynrose with no periods or commas or any keys touching it. So for tagging people you can just add their usernames at the bottom of your chapter or something, and then post it. And one final thing is that for asking questions…[Read more]

          doveys-apprentice replied 2 years, 3 months ago

          ^just make sure that no letters or symbols or touching it. and that you spell it correctly 😀

          evilerruler845 replied 2 years, 3 months ago

          ^^

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