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Chapter Three of A Tale Gone Wrong, brilliantly written by @evergirl391!!
I walk into the room to see one person already there. She’s lying on a top blue bunk, one of the four in the room. The other three are yellow, green, and pink. I smile, putting my bags on the pink one.
“What’s your name?” I ask the girl.
“Delilah,” she answers.
“Cool!” I respond. “I’m Eve.”
Suddenly, a streak dashes past the door. Delilah’s eyes widen.
“Don’t let him out!” she exclaims.
I jump to my feet, running after her. Delilah’s arm reaches out of the dorm room, and returns with a cat in her arms.
“She’s cute,” I comment “Can I pet her? Wait, is it a him or a her?” I ask hesitantly.
“This is Chance,” Delilah explains. “He’s a boy.” She holds him out a little, and I pet him on the back. He’s super soft.
“You have a lot of cats,” I comment, looking around the room to see 4 other cats.
Delilah nods. “The black cat is Clara, the kitten is Aria, the one on the yellow bed is Jennica, and then that’s Everest on the pillow!”
“Cool! I don’t really have many pets,” I say, trying to start a conversation.
“Yeah, you have to get used to them,” Delilah says, stroking Chance as he was wiggling to try to get out of her arms.
“This cat will not calm down, will he?” I ask, smirking slightly.
“Nope,” Delilah says, laughing. She lets him go, and he purrs on her bed. I smile, and sit down on my own, the pink one.
“We have two other roommates, right? Louisa and Twilight?” I say, remembering the sign at the front of the door.
Delilah nods. “I wonder when they’ll come…”
“Soon, I hope!” I exclaim. “The more the merrier…” I immediately regret saying that, but too late now, oh well.
As if right on cue, another person walks through the door.
“Hi!” she says. “I’m Twilight.”
Perfect timing, I think to myself.
Twilight unpacks her stuff on the green bed.
“I’m Eve,” I offer. “This is Delilah.”
“Hi, Eve and Delilah!” Twilight says back. She’s still unpacking.
Clara comes up to my bed. I gently pet her on the back.
Twilight finally finishes her stuff, and also sits down on her bed.
“You have a lot of cats,” she says, smiling. Aria has hopped onto her bed, and Twilight is now softly petting her fur. “They’re very cute!”
Delilah smiles. “Thanks!”
I smile back, still petting Clara. Some people think black cats are unlucky, but Clara isn’t one of those.
“This is Clara,” I say to Twilight.
“She’s already memorized the names of my cats,” Delilah adds.
“I’m going to be living with them for the rest of the year, might as well do it now!” I exclaim, chuckling. “The one you’re petting is Aria, the one that’s batting at the pillow is Chance. The sleeping one is Jennica, and the other one is Everest,” I say, nodding in the directions of the cats.
Twilight turns around in time to see Chance take another swing at her pillow. She chuckles, letting Aria off her bed and scooping up Chance. Chance wriggles out of her arms and continues batting at the pillow.
“Enough about cats,” Twilight says. “What about us? Where are you from? I’m from Gavaldon.”
“Neverland,” I answer.
A head peeks in from the door. Louisa, I think.
“Am I late?” Louisa asks.
“Well…later then the rest of us, but not necessarily,” I utter.
Louisa settles onto the yellow bed.
“So…should we…talk?” Twilight asks.
“Sure,” I shrug.
Just then, two more heads pop into the room.
“Um, isn’t our room full-” I start.
“Jasmine!” Delilah exclaims, getting up. “We met on the Flowerground,” she quickly explains to us.
“We’re roommates,” the other girl explains.
“…Introductions?” I ask expectantly.
“Oh, sorry, I’m Bryannah,” the girl says.
I shrug; the more the merrier! “You can sit down here,” I offer, scooting over to create some room on my bed. Bryannah smiles and sits down.
“We just came to talk, our dorm was getting boring,” Jasmine shrugs. “Yours sounded like there was stuff going on!”
“Well, you could say that,” I say, smirking, and pet Clara’s fur. “Mostly just us talking about cats and trying to actually talk about ourselves.”
“More than us” Bryannah shrugs.
“Well, the more the merrier, I guess,” I shrug.
“I guess we still are incapable of actually talking,” Twilight says after a few minutes of silence. Everyone giggles. I can already feel that we’re going to be good friends.
I see Delilah turning to an object like a fish tank on the desk next to her bed.
I lean over to see a turtle swimming in it.
“This is Anne,” Delilah explains, catching me staring.
“You have a turtle too?!” I ask.
And we all burst out laughing again.
@skylark14 (Allison [Li])
Awesome chapter! (I wonder when Lio will be added in.. 🤔) I thought of a couple more details about Lio that might be helpful! (If it’s too late you don’t have to add them) ✨Lio tends to be a bit anxious around new people. She usually warms up though. Lio also gets nervous when telling people Alice is her grandmother. Lio’s mother didn’t want her, so Alice raised her, but after Alice was accused of going insane, she was locked in an insane asylum in the looking glass. Lio was then raised by Alice’s older sister, who is her great aunt. Lio brought her 10-year-old cat, Chess, her white bunny, Mystery, and her golden retriever puppy, Goldie. They remind her of home (Wonderland) Lio also tends to be early to everything and gets very upset when she is late. Visits her grandmother often, even if sometimes she doesn’t understand what Alice is talking about. (Alice is slowly turning insane because of a spell Rafal cast of her because Alice made a discovery about him that no one could know). Very gullible. Can be swayed to Greater Evil very easily. (May betray her friends?)✨ I’m realizing this probably would’ve been better if I had just tagged you, but I thought you should know this about my character!
¡Es una muy buena escritora!
Puede que la haya ayudado o no a editar<s/.
¡Excelente! Si alguna vez necesita ayuda para editar, siempre puede preguntarme. ¡Estoy tan emocionado de que se desarrolle esta historia!
¡Yo también! Estén atentos para más concursos. ¿El español es tu lengua materna o no?
¡Oh, Dios, no! Estoy usando un traductor, ja, ja. El inglés es mi primer y único idioma, excepto por un pequeño lenguaje de señas.
Oop my mum just asked me if I was alright as when I realised my name was in this I started swearing snd shouting really loudly
I just translated what you said on my school Chromebook 😳 Hope they aren’t monitoring me! Heheheheheh
Yo no sé, I’m really tired and going through annoying girls stuff. But tbh I’ve really just lost the plot
Quiero decir, si te etiqueto por algo que no debería hablar en español, Rainey? Y Jasmine, pregunta si quieres que no te etiqueten. ¡No te quitaré la etiqueta si no quieres que lo haga!
Em if u were asking me about tags, keep tagging me for everything
Ooo, the mood of this chapter is so happy and fuzzy!! 😀 I also like how the conversation flows. Good job, Eve!
So jus a question…
When are you gonna introduce the Nevers?