Greetings everyone! It’s come to my attention that a lot of people post their writing here. Now, while I’m not comfortable sharing the full extent of my work (my poems, my more recent writing, etc), I thought it would be beneficial, since this sight seems to be a good place to receive constructive criticism and a kind but honest viewing. This is a…[Read more]
Ps. In case anyone was wondering, I have a few more chapters already written, that I had wrote months ago, when I first wrote this chapter. This isn’t all of the story!
I think that this is really descriptive and if you post or continue I will definitely read it. I also like your plot, it’s very creative, and the airy light perspective it’s narrated from. I would just find words to replace ‘sometime,’ ‘somewhere,’ ‘something’, to make it sound a lil less casual, I also often use those words repeatedly
Cool! Your writings amazing! I started writing on the site, and I get good criticism, so its definitely beneficial!
@/SILVER13 yeah, that’s definitely a habit of mine. I like to think that I’ve gotten better at not repeating words or phrases since writing this story, but the criticism is really appreciated! I always have to remind myself to be on the lookout for things like that, it’s such an easy habit to fall into, at least for me.
So firstly, welcome back Dreamer! It’s nice to see you again! This is absolutely amazing but a few tiny things. At the beginning where it says ‘With skin dark as midnight’, I feel like it would flow better if it was ‘With skin as dark as midnight. Also, I don’t know, but I feel like it would sound better if it was ‘repetitiveness of life’…[Read more]
This is great! I really thing that you should keep writing this!
If you do keep writing this, could you please tag me for it!