I like it! Very surprising. However, it’s kind of rushed. I think it would help it you broke it into paragraphs and added a bit more detail. I could help you, if you like.
Ok thanks for your criticism it’s very helpful and if you wanted to work together that would be great 🙂
One writing tip for you: In the English language, When someone says something and then someone else says something it has to be on a different line, for example
“Did you do your homework?” Said James
“Yes! I did it last night!” Exclaimed Shaya
I know that wasn’t a great example but do you see what I mean?
Anyways this is an…[Read more]
your story is amazing. I like the twist. If you slowed it down, it would be even better!
It’s amazing, but I agree, it’s a bit rushed, and there are some run on sentences. Other then that, I love it! Please tag me <3
@emerald886, maybe you can take time to carefully describe something to slow the events down a tiny bit. I know this works because i did the same thing as you did when i was a tiny bit smalle :))
Hi so i’m starting to write my first rp/series and thought i would introduce the main characters kinda like a blurb about them so here goes comment any ideas for the story if you have any 🙂
Evie has known she would one day be queen since she was born and has been training for it ever since. She can’t wait to get to the school for good and…[Read more]
oh wow, this is quite incredible, @EMERALD886. Can you comment on my post below?
who’s your favourite character in the school for good and evil series?