emerald886 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year ago

    Hi everyone this is the 1st chapter if you have any ideas on what to name the story comment it 🙂
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    @INDIGOSKY12
    @ELVIAOFCAMELOT
    @BEACHBIONIC
    @EVERGIRL391
    CHAPTER 1 THE LETTER
    *EVIE*
    ”Posture!” ”If you want to be…[Read more]

        effie replied 1 year ago

        I like it! Very surprising. However, it’s kind of rushed. I think it would help it you broke it into paragraphs and added a bit more detail. I could help you, if you like.

          emerald886 replied 1 year ago

          Ok thanks for your criticism it’s very helpful and if you wanted to work together that would be great 🙂

          beachbionic replied 1 year ago

          Yes…I agree, a bit rushed. NO OFFENCE WAS MEANT THAT WAS GREAT

          effie replied 1 year ago

          I might be able to work with you. I don’t know, though, I have way too many stories going on.

        evergirl391 replied 1 year ago

        Ooh suspenseful.
        One writing tip for you: In the English language, When someone says something and then someone else says something it has to be on a different line, for example
        “Did you do your homework?” Said James
        “Yes! I did it last night!” Exclaimed Shaya
        I know that wasn’t a great example but do you see what I mean?
        Anyways this is an…[Read more]

          emerald886 replied 1 year ago

          thanks that’s very helpful 🙂

        evergirl391 replied 1 year ago

        Your welcome! Glad I was able to help!

          aliceross4 replied 1 year ago

          your story is amazing. I like the twist. If you slowed it down, it would be even better!

          cocostar replied 8 months, 2 weeks ago

          *You’re

        thestoriangirl replied 1 year ago

        It’s amazing, but I agree, it’s a bit rushed, and there are some run on sentences. Other then that, I love it! Please tag me <3

        thestoriangirl replied 1 year ago

        Also maybe the story should be called Supposedly a Never?

          indigosky12 replied 1 year ago

          @emerald886, maybe you can take time to carefully describe something to slow the events down a tiny bit. I know this works because i did the same thing as you did when i was a tiny bit smalle :))

        elviaofcamelot replied 1 year ago

        This is really good, I do agree with what everyone else is saying tho. Tag me please

    emerald886 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year ago

    Hi so i’m starting to write my first rp/series and thought i would introduce the main characters kinda like a blurb about them so here goes comment any ideas for the story if you have any 🙂

    *Evie*
    Evie has known she would one day be queen since she was born and has been training for it ever since. She can’t wait to get to the school for good and…[Read more]

        indigosky12 replied 1 year ago

        oh wow, this is quite incredible, @EMERALD886. Can you comment on my post below?

        beachbionic replied 1 year ago

        Awesome! Tag me please!

        evergirl391 replied 1 year ago

        Tag me!

        elviaofcamelot replied 1 year ago

        This sounds so good, tag me please