- Load More
Hiya everyone! It’s me Emma, but instead of a chapter, today I have a short story about Evelyn, or as I call them, Ordinary Shorts! Heh heh. Don’t know what it is? Let me explain!
Okay, so what this is, is that some days instead of posting chapters, I will post a “short”, which is a small short story with the characters of my RP. Since these a…[Read more]
Hello Evers and Never! I’m back again with the 8th chapter of Evelyn’s tale 🙂 I hope you all enjoy this chapter. Feel free to comment any constructive criticisms or requests. Hope you like it!
Chapter 8: A lunch to remember (Narrator POV)
Evelyn was watching the clock. 1 minute and 37 seconds until she cou…[Read more]
That’s sweet! 🙂 I’ll never be able to post chapters this fast… you could catch up on the Atlantis vs. Luminescents doc (if you hadn’t already), but it might as well overwhelm you in big chompy bites… also that link I also need constructive criticism for the story and you mentioned that I should tell you in one of your posts… so here it is…[Read more]
oh yeah, i’ll make sure to check out your story!! I’ll try to leave the best constructive criticism i can haha. oh, and where can i find the link the Atlantis vs Luminescents doc? sorry it was deleted from my devices T__T
Hello everyone! Before you ask, yes i’ve been gone for months. That’s because thing were happening… Ya know, life was happening…. School, Life, even my phone was acting weird, so I basically just didnt use my phone for a while. But now i’m back and i’ll try to catch up on all that i missed. Heh heh. So i hope you enjoy the next chapter of Evel…[Read more]
* I hand you a cupcake that says welcome back on it*
EMMA, WHERE WERE YOU?!?!?!
*says quietly: it’s like you disappeared off the face of this earth…*
Anyway, very nice chapter!!! 🙂
Yeah srry about that :/ but i’m happy im finally back here yaaaay! And thank you!! 😀
🙂 Also, I need some constructive criticism for a story I am supposed turn in. Could you please check it out? Thanks
And you can go to my activity to see what this is all for by clicking on my avatar (profile picture) on my most recent post or just scroll down to check it out.
@evilerruler845 Lol I thought you were talking about me XD
Would you mind if I check out the story as well?
Heellooo Evers and Nevers! I’m back again with the 6th Chapter!!! And before we get to the chapter i’d just like to say that i know my chapters are short. I dunno why, but I find it easier to write shorter chapters in case anyone noticed how they’re not very long. Anyway, lets go!
Chapter 6: “Your Prince” (Evelyn POV)
I just realized that i…[Read more]
Hi! This is actually the second time im posting this. I had to change some stuff. But I’ve finally finished the 5th chapter in
my RP! When i wrote this I didn’t have much inspiration 😐 but i hope that it’s still okay…. but anyway i hope you enjoy reading it and please comment constructive criticism and requests! 🙂
CHAPTER 5- EVELYN POV
Hello again! Here’s Levi’s bio. (And if you’re wondering how I posted it so quickly, it’s been in my notes for a while now.) I hope you like it. He will be in my RP quite often now.
Name: Levi Sagittarius Castle
Height: 5′ 9″
Family: Grandmother is Queen Lila Castle & Grandfather is King Robert Castle…[Read more]
Nice bio! You could add more detail and include a backstory. Also, you’re going to have to be more specific when you’re talking about talents, because at firsthand, does Levi ACTUALLY have a knack for those talents? Can he learn them right away? There is a difference between skills and talents. And you could add a bit more to hainfears and…[Read more]
Hello everyone! I’ve finished writing the 4th chapter! I’ve been trying lately to add lots of detail to my chapters, but i just started RPing so my story isnt that great heh heh, but anyway i hope you enjoy!
Chapter 4 – Levi’s POV (I’ll post Levi’s BIO soon!!)
Finally. I’m at the school for Good! I’ve been waiting to be here for so long.
Right now…[Read more]
Nice job! I also have a character named Levi. He’s male too.
Hello everybody! Yes, i know, this is INCREDIBLY LATE. I’ve just been having so many problems posting things sorry! But anyway, this is the 3rd chapter!
I know it’s not the best, but i’ll keep trying harder to make it better! 🙂
CHAPTER 3: (3rd person POV)
Evelyn had just walked into her room, which was magnificent and VERY pink, with three bed…[Read more]
And a GIANT thanks to @evilerruler845 , because without them I wouldn’t have been able to post this! Thanks you so much! 🙂 🙂
Very nice chapter!!! 🙂 You could try to add more detail, to try to explain more vividly about the characters, setting and plot. And no problem! 😉 Nice job!!! 🙂
Hi! This is the 2nd chapter of my tale!
it’s not the best, but i’ll keep trying harder!!
CHAPTER 2: (Evelyn’s POV)
My heart is racing right now. What is happening? Did the bird just grab ME? ME?!?! This must be a mistake! Why didn’t it take someone else? Someone… with pure goodness?! I just noticed Ronan snickering at me.
“What’s so fun…[Read more]
Nice chapter! 🙂 You said in the beginning of your chapter that Ronan was snickering at Evelyn, but then you said Liam’s eyes softened for a moment…? So was Ronan or Liam taken? Other than this, nice job!
Hi! This is the first chapter of my tale! Sorry if it’s not the best, but i’ll keep trying harder!! I hope that you all like it, and please comment if you want to be tagged, if you want me to add characters, or if you have constructive criticism!
CHAPTER 1: (Evelyn’s perspective)
Evelyn woke up and groaned. “It’s here again.” She said to her…[Read more]
Cool chapter! However when you said Evelyn’s perspective, it is in HER POV (point of view). This means that everything narrated in this chapter is said in her perspective, so I would’ve expected a lot of I(s) in the chapter. Btw, I also have a character named Evelyn. She was the first bio I made on here. 😉 Id also suggest some more detail again.…[Read more]
also I’m weird I know I know but I think Ronan sounds cute…
Of course! @evelynrose 🙂 I like helping around. Sometimes I overdo it, sometimes I do it at the wrong time. Ha ha. Well, I make too many mistakes anyway. 🙂