finnes123 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 weeks, 4 days ago

    I Hope you guys enjoy my first book. Tell me what i should improve on as well. Chapter one, A Tale of Many. Like any ordinary people, there are two friends that get kidnapped on the same day. A soul of evil and a soul of good. Two friends by the name of Elias and James went to the woods everyday to do potions and trying to call animals. But one…[Read more]

        evilerruler845 replied 2 weeks, 1 day ago

        This is a good start! Especially for the beginning… However, all your writing is in a big, messy blob (not the writing itself, just the overlook of it), and this won’t attract readers. Separate them into tinier paragraphs, such as when you use dialogue and one person talks, and then the next talks. When the next person talks, you must start a n…[Read more]