My Ranking Points
this is a little story i wrote that is kinda related to sge.
you probably wont like it.
Devani didn’t know where she was. A blur of
colours streaked around her. One of them being her abnormal flaming red hair. She was dizzy and still at the same time. She could hear faint voices getting closer in the distance…..
“She’s got a rotten soul and you know it! Probably gonna-”
“She’ll be fine and I’m sure she-”
“You know the reason you’re dying is because of her. She has the-”
“She will get the visions soon enough, and then-”
Devani could only hear bits and pieces of conversation, but she knew one of the voices was her mother…
New voices came.
“I wish I could have her.” said a voice she recognized.
It was Shay.
“She is evil and you are good. You can’t.” said another
“Acelynn or Devani? One of them has to be good, right? And who cares?”said the first
“First, you can’t love both. Second, they are both wicked. Third, everybody will care!”said the other.
Suddenly, it went quiet. A face appeared in front of her. It was a mangled lion with it’s jaws opening to swallow her. It’s head ****** sideways and it went limp. A new scene came, with Acelynn stepping into a pitch black forest. A scream sounded and she rushed into the forest to find fifteen ravens pecking at Acelynn.
Devani jolted awake, sweating. She was gasping for air and gripping her soft pillow. Was it true she caused her mother’s death? And if so, what did she have that caused it? What visions? And since when did the most handsome, cool, popular, good guy in all of the land like her?
There were too many questions, and not enough time to answer them. Besides, it was just a dream…right? For the moment, all she wanted to do was find Acelynn and make sure she was okay. Devani slipped out of bed and put on her cape and tall, flat, leather laced boots.
Devani crept through the hall past her father’s room and the 19 year old sister that despised her. Devani smelled the leftover bread from dinner and ripped off a big chunk for the road. She swung open the kitchen door and stepped onto the wide cobblestone pathway. She shut the front door to her small village house and set out towards Acelynn’s house.
I like it!
Have you posted, like, an intro, with the character’s background and stuff?
I’m wondering because it might make this more clear for me…but good job!
thank you!(just say if you want to be tagged and i will tag you!)