My Ranking Points
Every superhero has their origin story.
Mine’s a little different, though. I’m not a humanoid alien like Superman, or just Hydra, like Batman’s just… Batman.
I was just born with powers. I can make anything from water. Swords, knives, baby unicorns, you name it.
Powers aside, I’m just a normal girl. I have an extra-annoying little sister named Susie, two parents, and I get As in school. I’m pretty average.
My parents don’t know I’m Hydra. To them I’m just Kristen. Nothing special, just Kristen.
They disapprove of Hydra. They think this little girl is too young to roam the streets fighting crime.
Little do they know that girl they disapprove of is me.
Every princess has more to say than a title.
My thing to say’s a little different, though. I’m not locked up in a tower like Rapunzel, or just Maryellen, like Sleeping Beauty is just Sleeping Beauty.
No, I was born with a secret. And it’s not necessarily a secret I’m willing to share.
Not yet, that is.
Hey, I hope you liked this, please give me feedback and tag requests if you wish. Thank you and have a good day.
Can I offer a bio for another character in kristen’s story? a villain, perhaps?
Age: (idk like Hydras age)
Superhero name: Ray
Power: She can control light and color.
Uniform: She wears an ankle to neck to wrist uniform that changes color based on what she needs it to be, although she can’t consciously control it.
Idk anything else
My writing can be cringey sometimes, I apologize
I mean lots of people get As and are perfectly average people.
but putting those two things side by side seems really dumb. And if anything, adding ‘i get A’s’ is really expositional. I mean it’s okay to have exposition but when it’s obvious, it’s horrible. She’s trying to describe how average she is, then she says she gets above-average marks? before saying she’s average directly after? it comes off as whiny and spoiled. I suppose it the character’s personality. She disregard’s her parent’s obvious reasons to not want her ‘crime-fighting’ and almost doesn’t care that she was born with powers. I was criticizing more the hypocrisy of the character rather than the author, that’s not to say this writing doesn’t need serious work on it to make it good.
Omg, the beginnings are so amazing! Please tag me!
Also, the Batman thing was hilarious
You say that you aren’t criticizing the author, then you say her work needs a lot of improvement to her any good. That was rude and unneeded. Can you even comment on a post without being rude Gwen?
excuse me? I don’t even know who you are and you already have an opinion of me? wow okay
I referenced that specific line about A’s and said that what I had originally said wasn’t really against the author, everything else is constructive criticism. Yes, it needs improvement, you can’t expect her work to be perfect at this age, no ones is. She said herself that no one gives constructive criticism and was thankful for mine.
What reason do you have to be so angry at me that you make up reasons to argue?
@gwen-elodie thanks for the feedback, I’m glad someone actually gave criticism because nobody ever does that.
Actually I do know you a little. Not as a friend though. What I was saying, was instead of just going “this needs more work to be actual good”, you could’ve just told her how to improve.
I gave her feedback on how her character came off as, am i expected to write as thesis on every piece of writing i see?
you either know me, or you don’t, theres no inbetween. You’re opinions about me don’t really matter since you don’t know me. You’ve either been fed information from someone who has already made their decisions on me without thinking yourself, or seen a situation where you didn’t know both sides of the story
So someone has to be with you 24/7 to ‘know you’? Whatever this is stupid, I was merely commenting on the rude way you told my friend to improve her story.