i-am-a-tropical-avocado

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    i-am-a-tropical-avocado posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 2 months, 2 weeks ago

    @iceangel
    @everimagine
    Here’s a little sample of that RP I told you about, more like the prologue. I hope you enjoy it:

    Kristen
    Every superhero has their origin story.
    Mine’s a little different, though. I’m not a humanoid alien like Superman, or just Hydra, like Batman’s just… Batman.
    I was just born with powers. I can make anything from water. Swords, knives, baby unicorns, you name it.
    Powers aside, I’m just a normal girl. I have an extra-annoying little sister named Susie, two parents, and I get As in school. I’m pretty average.
    My parents don’t know I’m Hydra. To them I’m just Kristen. Nothing special, just Kristen.
    They disapprove of Hydra. They think this little girl is too young to roam the streets fighting crime.
    Little do they know that girl they disapprove of is me.

    Maryellen
    Every princess has more to say than a title.
    My thing to say’s a little different, though. I’m not locked up in a tower like Rapunzel, or just Maryellen, like Sleeping Beauty is just Sleeping Beauty.
    No, I was born with a secret. And it’s not necessarily a secret I’m willing to share.
    Not yet, that is.

    Hey, I hope you liked this, please give me feedback and tag requests if you wish. Thank you and have a good day.

        iceangel replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh
        Angel like
        Can I offer a bio for another character in kristen’s story? a villain, perhaps?

          i-am-a-tropical-avocado replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

          OoOoO yass

          iceangel replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

          Name; Crystal
          Age: (idk like Hydras age)
          Superhero name: Ray
          Power: She can control light and color.
          Uniform: She wears an ankle to neck to wrist uniform that changes color based on what she needs it to be, although she can’t consciously control it.
          Idk anything else

        everimagine replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        This is so good! I love it, Avocado!

        gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        you say she gets A’s and then she is average? lol what

          i-am-a-tropical-avocado replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

          My writing can be cringey sometimes, I apologize

          princezzdot replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          I mean lots of people get As and are perfectly average people.

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          but putting those two things side by side seems really dumb. And if anything, adding ‘i get A’s’ is really expositional. I mean it’s okay to have exposition but when it’s obvious, it’s horrible. She’s trying to describe how average she is, then she says she gets above-average marks? before saying she’s average directly after? it comes off as whiny and spoiled. I suppose it the character’s personality. She disregard’s her parent’s obvious reasons to not want her ‘crime-fighting’ and almost doesn’t care that she was born with powers. I was criticizing more the hypocrisy of the character rather than the author, that’s not to say this writing doesn’t need serious work on it to make it good.

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          lol I wrote a lot

        galeinthesnow replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        OH MY GOD I LOVE THIS SO MUCH PLEASE TAG ME!!!!!!

          i-am-a-tropical-avocado replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

          Thanks

        sallysallysally replied 2 months, 2 weeks ago

        Omg, the beginnings are so amazing! Please tag me!
        Also, the Batman thing was hilarious

        princessrachael replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Tag me

          princezzdot replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          You say that you aren’t criticizing the author, then you say her work needs a lot of improvement to her any good. That was rude and unneeded. Can you even comment on a post without being rude Gwen?

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          excuse me? I don’t even know who you are and you already have an opinion of me? wow okay
          I referenced that specific line about A’s and said that what I had originally said wasn’t really against the author, everything else is constructive criticism. Yes, it needs improvement, you can’t expect her work to be perfect at this age, no ones is. She said herself that no one gives constructive criticism and was thankful for mine.
          What reason do you have to be so angry at me that you make up reasons to argue?

        i-am-a-tropical-avocado replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        @gwen-elodie thanks for the feedback, I’m glad someone actually gave criticism because nobody ever does that.

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          no problem 🙂

        princezzdot replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Actually I do know you a little. Not as a friend though. What I was saying, was instead of just going “this needs more work to be actual good”, you could’ve just told her how to improve.

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          I gave her feedback on how her character came off as, am i expected to write as thesis on every piece of writing i see?
          you either know me, or you don’t, theres no inbetween. You’re opinions about me don’t really matter since you don’t know me. You’ve either been fed information from someone who has already made their decisions on me without thinking yourself, or seen a situation where you didn’t know both sides of the story

        princezzdot replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        Oh my god

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          how else do you ‘know’ me?

        princezzdot replied 2 months, 1 week ago

        So someone has to be with you 24/7 to ‘know you’? Whatever this is stupid, I was merely commenting on the rude way you told my friend to improve her story.

          gwen-elodie replied 2 months, 1 week ago

          No, I’m saying that you knowing me a little bit isn’t enough to say that i can’t comment on a post without being rude.
          It wasn’t rude what I said, she herself thanked me for the feedback.

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