julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    ok here is chp. 3
    Gwen woke to the sound of a sweet but loud bell ringing.”You better get up if you want to be ready in time”said a girl with bangs and wavy dark brown hair .”My name is Emiline , what is yours?” ”Gwen ”she said as she sleeply got out of bed .Gwen looked around. There where two girls both wearing navy blue sailor dresses…[Read more]

        effie replied 7 months ago

        Hi @julianna910. Good job adding details. I think you should use delicious instead of yummy when describing Gwen’s breakfast. Other than that, that was your best chapter yet!

          bookworm87654321 replied 7 months ago

          Wow, when I compare your first chapter and your third chapter, you’re improving at the speed of light. If you keep on improving at this rate, you’ll be one of the best RP-ers by the end of next week. Now maybe it’s time to start extending your chapters. Are you doing classes next chapter? Right now, you’re giving us crumbs of your story, but one…[Read more]

        ellieofgalvadon replied 7 months ago

        nice work!

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          thank so sorry about not posting

    julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    chp 2
    dashing across the perfect green lawn was a sandy haired green eyed prince ”are you alright my lady”.It was love at first sight.”Yes quite” Gwen replied.”Gwendolyn of enchantea”said a kind looking purple haired fairy.”Hello”Gwen said nervesly”you,dear are in dorm 7 and here are your books”.The fairie gracfully handed Gwen
    6…[Read more]

        sydneywhite replied 7 months ago

        The story was good, but if I may, I’ll give you some advice to make your story one of the best:
        You could use a spelling checker for the grammar
        Try using capital letters more.
        Try working on your punctuation.
        Try dividing your work into paragraphs to make it easier to read.
        Try making the sentences a bit more detailed and longer. You could also t…[Read more]

          bookworm87654321 replied 7 months ago

          I agree with @sydneywhite, and also, good job adding details. Details are still a thing to work on, but you’re getting there! Just some friendly advice: you could write each chapter on Google Docs beforehand and then copy-paste it onto RP Level 0. This would help because google docs has built-in spelling and grammar check, which would help a lot…[Read more]

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          thanks and I am working on a chapter now

        effie replied 7 months ago

        I agree with @bookworm87654321.

    julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    ok soooo how was it

    julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    chp 1.
    Gwen had been waiting for to night her whole life.Her BFF Vivian had come over earlier to help her prepare and pack.Excited but tirerd.”Where am I”and then she rememberd welcome to the school for good said a banner hung on the most buitiful castle ever princess swormed around her and there he was the most handsome prince ever

        bookworm87654321 replied 7 months ago

        A bit rushed. Can you slow it down and add a few more details? How does the castle look? How does the handsome prince look? How did she feel seeing Good Castle for the first time? Remember to show, don’t tell!

          rileyraer replied 7 months ago

          I agree with @bookworm87654321 Please make it more detailed, the longer the better.

          helennguyen replied 7 months ago

          I also agree. Add more detail about what you are seeing, how you got there, the prince’s features and describe Vivian and yourself. But other than that great beginning!

        effie replied 7 months ago

        I think you should add more detail. It’s a nice story line, but I think that a chapter is slightly longer than that. I agree with @bookworm87654321.

    julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    age:10
    name-Gwen
    school-Good
    apperince-medium height tan skin dark brown eyes and hair always wears gowns
    personality-outgoing smart
    flaw-always reading
    backround-Snow Whites grandaughter but she wants to learn and be a better princess
    pet-a puppy named lady so is it good

        helennguyen replied 7 months ago

        Oh that means were sisters I wrote a story a few months or weeks ago saying l was Snow White’s grand daughter. It’s okay if you don’t wanna be “sisters” but if you do please say so and I’ll mention you throughout my series!

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          ok what if we din’t know each other but we meet at the school for good

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          and I did not mean to copy so if you want me to change I will

          helennguyen replied 7 months ago

          So like long lost sisters?

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          yeah may be in the next sires

    julianna910 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 7 months ago

    hi im new

        evilerruler845 replied 7 months ago

        Welcome to RP (roleplay) Level 0! I’m @evilerruler845, so click my username to read my stories.
        But first, why RP? RP means to roleplay, and here, it means to create your own characters to start writing stories/a story about them. If you’re the type of person who likes writing, then this is the place for you!
        Next, there are four levels of RP her…[Read more]

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          thanks so much!

        13unicorns13 replied 7 months ago

        Welcome!!!!!!!! *giant welcome banner rolls down behind me and confetti explodes everywhere* HIIIIIII! I’m Una! First year evergirl! *sticks out hand to shake* Not sure if this was said yet but it’s especially important to the open chat DO. NOT. EVER. QUOTE. THE. BEE. MOVIE. Or else the shadows will come for us all *shudders* other than that have…[Read more]

          julianna910 replied 7 months ago

          haha!