ok here is chp. 3
Gwen woke to the sound of a sweet but loud bell ringing.”You better get up if you want to be ready in time”said a girl with bangs and wavy dark brown hair .”My name is Emiline , what is yours?” ”Gwen ”she said as she sleeply got out of bed .Gwen looked around. There where two girls both wearing navy blue sailor dresses…[Read more]
Hi @julianna910. Good job adding details. I think you should use delicious instead of yummy when describing Gwen’s breakfast. Other than that, that was your best chapter yet!
Wow, when I compare your first chapter and your third chapter, you’re improving at the speed of light. If you keep on improving at this rate, you’ll be one of the best RP-ers by the end of next week. Now maybe it’s time to start extending your chapters. Are you doing classes next chapter? Right now, you’re giving us crumbs of your story, but one…[Read more]
dashing across the perfect green lawn was a sandy haired green eyed prince ”are you alright my lady”.It was love at first sight.”Yes quite” Gwen replied.”Gwendolyn of enchantea”said a kind looking purple haired fairy.”Hello”Gwen said nervesly”you,dear are in dorm 7 and here are your books”.The fairie gracfully handed Gwen
The story was good, but if I may, I’ll give you some advice to make your story one of the best:
You could use a spelling checker for the grammar
Try using capital letters more.
Try working on your punctuation.
Try dividing your work into paragraphs to make it easier to read.
Try making the sentences a bit more detailed and longer. You could also t…[Read more]
I agree with @sydneywhite, and also, good job adding details. Details are still a thing to work on, but you’re getting there! Just some friendly advice: you could write each chapter on Google Docs beforehand and then copy-paste it onto RP Level 0. This would help because google docs has built-in spelling and grammar check, which would help a lot…[Read more]
Gwen had been waiting for to night her whole life.Her BFF Vivian had come over earlier to help her prepare and pack.Excited but tirerd.”Where am I”and then she rememberd welcome to the school for good said a banner hung on the most buitiful castle ever princess swormed around her and there he was the most handsome prince ever
A bit rushed. Can you slow it down and add a few more details? How does the castle look? How does the handsome prince look? How did she feel seeing Good Castle for the first time? Remember to show, don’t tell!
I agree with @bookworm87654321 Please make it more detailed, the longer the better.
apperince-medium height tan skin dark brown eyes and hair always wears gowns
backround-Snow Whites grandaughter but she wants to learn and be a better princess
pet-a puppy named lady so is it good
Oh that means were sisters I wrote a story a few months or weeks ago saying l was Snow White’s grand daughter. It’s okay if you don’t wanna be “sisters” but if you do please say so and I’ll mention you throughout my series!
ok what if we din’t know each other but we meet at the school for good
hi im new
Welcome to RP (roleplay) Level 0! I’m @evilerruler845, so click my username to read my stories.
But first, why RP? RP means to roleplay, and here, it means to create your own characters to start writing stories/a story about them. If you’re the type of person who likes writing, then this is the place for you!
Next, there are four levels of RP her…[Read more]
Welcome!!!!!!!! *giant welcome banner rolls down behind me and confetti explodes everywhere* HIIIIIII! I’m Una! First year evergirl! *sticks out hand to shake* Not sure if this was said yet but it’s especially important to the open chat DO. NOT. EVER. QUOTE. THE. BEE. MOVIE. Or else the shadows will come for us all *shudders* other than that have…[Read more]