My Ranking Points
Hello awesome nerds. Yup, I’m back……. Not that it really matters anyway.Anyhow, May is gone with the wind till’ next year , so that means I can finsih my RP on level 0. Yay. Soooo…….Yeah. I’ll leave a short chapter bellow. Read it, or don’t as you like. Oh, one more thing- PLEASE DON’T COMMENT ABOUT THE QUALITY OF THE CHAPTER UNLESS YOU READ IT. Thank you. Enjoy the chapter (:
‘Well………………. This is probably the stupidest thing I’ve ever done.’ I think to myself as I look for Claudia. I have to hurry up- Neko and Miko are outside destracting the nevers, and the more I waste my time, the more I waste they’res. I pull the hood of black hoodie up and try to stay in the shadows well (attempting) to make a list of the most likely places she’d be.
1. Ummmmm…… Outside with the nevers
2. The dining room
3. Uhmmmm… The mane hallway.
I quietly scale down the stairs towards the mane hallway. I’ll look there first, then I’ll head towards the other two. I look around the mane hall- nevers. Everywhere. I stay to the side as best as possible. ” OOKKKKAAAAYYYY!” I hear an all to farmiliar voice say.
Constructive criticism: could do better on the grammar and the punctuation. See the end of your third sentence? You used “they’res”, which should have been “theirs” as you are pertaining to possession. :> in your #3 by the way, you might be meaning ‘main hallway’ as ‘mane’ is….well…hair. Your verb tense is consistent, nice.. and one last thing: in your last sentence, “an all too familiar voice say.” :> Nice chapter though :>