ravenqueen123

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    ravenqueen123 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 7 months ago

    I have the prologue for my new story! I hope you guys like it and I hope to that I’ll like this story more than my last one 😉

    Prologue
    I’m guessing that most of you have read the classic fairytales but have you really read them? Have you read the real stories behind them? You probably haven’t but that’s why I’m here, to give you a story that tells the truth.
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    Deep inside mountains that no one in the Endless Woods had ever seen before, was a cave. The cave wasn’t big nor small. It wasn’t glamorous or dreadful. But it was occupied by three wizened old men with long white beards.
    The men were skeletal thin and didn’t have any teeth. The first had unsettling blue eyes that stayed glued to one particular spot. The second had warm, chocolate brown eyes that warmed you from the inside out. And the last old man had blazing red eyes that seemed to set anything aflame with a single glance.
    The three old men sat around a roughly cut, stone dais that had a single disk on it. The disk was intricately designed with black obsidian and white marble. The obsidian gleamed with malice and hate, fitting perfectly in its place. Some of the obsidian was carved into what looked like black feathers. It looked like the black represented Evil in a way nothing else could.
    The marble shined with elegance and perfection. The marble had a wavy pattern in it that looked like it could embody any Good. The white element was carved so perfectly that it seemed to be in its raw form, no polishing or buffing.
    The three men studied the disk, not even daring to move in its presence. Then the disk began to glow. It glowed with white and black light, then, it began to spin. It spun so fast that the lights coming from it blended together, giving a dull grey glow.
    Then, like a reflection in a lake, a vision came to view in the spinning disk. The vision showed two girls, both were in Good but they looked like polar opposites. One was quiet and strong while the other was outgoing and curious. The vision changed slightly so that you seemed to look right into the girls souls. Both glowed white but there was something else. Something much more ancient and secret than anything before.
    The old men looked puzzled when they first saw this but than realization slowly dawned in their eyes. The realization that something terrible was going to happen.
    “That can’t possibly be,” croaked the man with brown eyes.
    “They are both chosen by the same spirit,” rasped the blue eyed one. “That is impossible!”
    “It seems our old friend found two souls that can hold him,” wheezed the red eyed fellow. “It seems that Good will have two souls that have a bit of the Good Brother reincarnated in them.”
    The disk was slowing down and the grey glow was subsiding. The three men all looked at each other, sharing the same look.
    “Well then,” the red eyed man said, “we will just have to wait a couple of centuries, won’t we?”

    I hope that you guys enjoyed this. I haven’t got a name for the story and I would like to her a suggestions. Bye-bye pillows that look like bacon 😉 😆 😉

        leslie191234 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Oh my!!! That was fabulously mysterious!!! Great prologue it really dragged me in! 😀

        So… When’s chapter 1 coming out? 🙂

        ravenqueen123 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Thanks Les! I have two agree that I do like this prologue 😉
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        All in due time 😉 😈

        leslie191234 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Gah you’re killing me!!!

        ravenqueen123 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        😈

        jlb23 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Wonderful entry! And yes… When is chapter one coming?

        jlb23 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Oh, and can you squeeze my characters into their somehow? The other day I volunteered my characters… So here you go.
        Jackie’s Bio
        Name: Jaclyn Witch
        Nickname: Jackie 😉
        Age: 14
        Gender: Female
        Parents: Snow Witch (never met woodsmen father)
        Ever\Never: Ever
        Appearance: Silver waist length hair that is usually in a braid. Has black eyes (only look of her father) that are framed with long dark lashes. Her skin is pale, and her body is slim and (though you can’t tell) muscular. She wears silver and black tunics or short dresses, usually with a black cape with silver branch patterns. Sometimes goes barefoot. When she doesn’t, she wears black leather boots.
        Personality: Shy, sweet, nervous. Tries not to stand out but that usually backfires. Likes her solitude. Sweet and careful.
        Talent: Controlling ice and wind. Is working on conjuring ice from nothing.
        Fingerglow: Brilliant Silver
        Friends: Qiana of Hearts, Maison Merman (later in the story) and Kendra.
        Siblings: None
        Wish: Not to be a Never.
        Pets: Snowy owl named Icicle.
        Weapon: See TALENT
        Crush: None. At the Castle, she Never met a boy her age.
        Other: At the Castle, her best friend was Icicle the Owl.
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        Qiana’s Bio
        Name: Qiana of Hearts of Wonderland
        Nickname: Qi
        Age:14 (a little younger than Jackie)
        Gender: Female
        Parents: Queen and King of Hearts
        Ever\Never: Ever
        Appearance: Red dresses or red top with jeans. Chunky black jewelry (if she wears jewelry at all!) No makeup!!!!!!!!!! Pretty, but not over the top. Likes long red hair to be down. Fair skin. Gray eyes.
        Personality: Loud, outspoken, friendly and protective of her good friends and (annoying) brother.
        Talent: Can do Charmspeak, but that is a secret that even her closest friends don’t know about.
        Finger glow: Maroon
        Friends: Jackie Witch and Carrie Card Soldier (back in wonderland) and Maison Merman.
        Siblings: Quintin of Hearts, who is 10.
        Wish: To please her mother and have a Good fairy tale.
        Pets: A miniature seal named Dilly that she found at the Wonderlandian shore.
        Weapon: See TALENT
        Crush: Um….
        Other: She owns a bloodred journal that, when she writes in it, it will write back. She has a connection with dreams… Caused by Villicent, and unknown by both of them.
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        Maison’s Bio
        Name: Maison Merman
        Nickname: None
        Age: 13 1/2
        Gender: male
        Parents: Mermaids in Mermaid Lagoon, Neverland.
        Ever\Never: Never
        Appearance: Dark jeans, dark navy shirt and dark blue eyes. He has shaggy black hair, and sharp features. Dark hair is commonly falling over his eyes. Pale skin, and freckles on his nose that don’t quite go with this ‘cold’ look.
        Personality: Quiet, cold and clever. Always has a clever comeback. Loyal to a TRUE friend (of which he has none).
        Talent: Can breath underwater, talk to sea animals.
        Finger glow: Aqua Blue
        Friends: FRIEND, no S. Arle the sea turtle. (Qiana and Jackie think they’re his friends.)
        Siblings: None.
        Wish: To have a person that cares.
        Pets: Arle, the sea turtle. He is sarcastic and amusing. Likes to tease his master.
        Weapon: Jagged dagger he found himself, on the seafloor.
        Crush: Qiana of Hearts…….even though Nevers Never Love.
        Other: Mother and Father didn’t really like him, making him colder and harsher. Likes to dwell in cold water.

          princessalyson replied 4 years, 7 months ago

          hi jackie can i use your carecters in my book

        ravenqueen123 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Alright Jackie, it shall be an honor to use your bios 😉

          theheartofgold101 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

          wow! awesome! Hey is your name sabrina? I took your quiz, and I got 60%! I got top rank too. I called myself bloop!

        alexsuzuya replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Wow, this seems really good, I am anxious for what comes next 🙂

        soulreaper replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        add lukas!! add lukas!!
        @soulreaper
        name: Lukas Faust Gressmann
        age: 14
        school: Good
        finger-glow color: jet black with white streaks
        features: ash-grey hair, blue eyes, nearly non-existent but just really thin eyebrows, pale skin, pointed ears, thin pale lips, overly tall for his age
        father:
        mother: dead.
        type of kid: illegitimate
        likes: being Evil, being alone, fighting, reading books, looking at himself in the mirror and imagining what he’d look like with a Never uniform, messing up his hair and dyeing it black (only for it to magically turn grey again), throwing his Ever badge
        dislikes: being an Ever, seeing his Ever badge back on his chest

        jlb23 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Thank you, RavenQueen!

        ravenqueen123 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        I will try to update as soon as possible 😉

        stargirl13 replied 4 years, 5 months ago

        Amazing! I can’t wait for Chapter One!

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