My Ranking Points
So before we start, Rayla will actually be from Camelot because it makes sense and I haven’t read the first trilogy in a while so bear with me 🙂 the chapters will also be quite short
“Your children will be interesting.”
That was my favourite thing Merlin has ever said, because the Agatha/Tedros fam are quite interesting. Mom had a lot of kids, so one of almost every hair and eye colour combination you could have. Me? I’ve got Dad’s blue eyes and tan skin and Mom’s dark hair, but let’s actually get on with this.
“Ray get on with it!” Dad barked as I stuffed clothes into a trunk. “You’re going to be lateee!”
“Coming!” I shouted, forcing down the lid and rushing out the door. Dad handed me a Flowerground ticket. I knew what happened now. I had seen my older siblings do it so many times. Take the carriage to the Flowerground, board the Hibiscus line to SGE.
“Bye sweetie.” Mom embraced me.
“Bye Ray,” chorused my younger siblings.
“See ya kiddo,” winked my Dad.
And with that, I was yanked into the carriage and boarded away.
“Oh lookie here, how cute,” cooed a ravishing blonde girl with the deepest blue eyes. ” A Camelot girl! ”
I rolled my eyes. “What’s your name?” I asked.
“It’s Tara hon. Tara of Jaunt Jolie,” she replied in a sickly sweet voice . It was hate at first sight. Muttering a goodbye, I grabbed my luggage and strolled inside of the Ever hall, dreading what I would see. Would faculty be friendly? Or would they snarl at me? Maybe they would even say I belonged in Evil…never mind. Mom always said she had those doubts too, but eventually she realised she was Good all along. I cringed when she said that, but now I took it in.
I took a deep breath and walked through the door, beautiful blonde girls trailing behind me. My eyes swept over the detail. All the decor was nice, but I had read about it. All the teachers were like the ones in The Tale of Sophie and Agatha. If everything was the same, how would I get my own fairytale? Would it be just a replica of Mom’s? I fretted, and that’s when the Dean started to talk.
Done! I hope it wasn’t too bad, and any constructive criticism would be appreciated, but no hate please! Ty 🙂
I like your RP! I do have a little bit of constructive criticism though. For starters, the first sentence was a little bit confusing. Try to imagine how a child from Camelot would actually speak, how they would act. Make sure to check your spelling before you post. But other than that you did very well! I would like to see the next chapter, please Tag me!