My Ranking Points
Hi guys! I know I haven’t been on recently but I have been thinking of writing this story that I have thought of for a long time. But I will also continue writing my first story, “The Journey into the New World”. Just to let you know my second story is not SGE related. So here is the first bio for my second story.
School: Enchanted Talents Academy
Parents: Andrew (father), Maia (mom)
Siblings: younger brother Tyler, twin brother Aiden
Personality: is smart, kind, nice, very friendly, very responsible, outgoing, confident, sometimes is rude and sarcastic when she gets annoyed and irritated, very patient, sometimes can be a tomboy, is most of the time serious and it is rare when she is not, is very loyal, is very independent and likes to work by herself but she depends on others once in awhile.
Flaws: can get snappy and rude when she doesn’t mean it
Fears: losing the ones she loves the most
Appearance: big cobalt blue eyes with a mix of periwinkle, long dark eyelashes, soft pink lips, small nose, rosy cheeks, dark eyebrows slightly curved up, a mixture of cool brown, butterscotch, and ash blonde hair that lands past her shoulders into curls and her skin tone is beige.
Clothes: jean shorts and skinny jeans that’s either blue or red, combat boots, ombré shades of grey t-shirt or a short lavender dress with black leggings, a white/goldish colored belt and a gold necklace with a golden heart-shaped charm on it.
Talent: fighting, has photographic memory, is flexible and agile, and she is a quick learner
Powers: the power to break spells
Weapons: dagger, bow and arrow
Crush: no one currently
Pets: a phoenix named Flame
Friends: Rena, Jack, Freya
Enemies: (will be revealed later in the story)
Backstory: When she and Aiden, were 6 years old, and their baby brother Tyler was 2 years old, they were told by their mom that their dad has died, but they were never told how. Their mom said that she didn’t have enough money to support them so they moved to another town, but then they soon had to move again to another town for that same reason the following year. And the next couple of years they have been moving around from place to place. But then they finally settled down in a village called, Swalloon. From all the new places they’ve been, Lia learned many new things, like sewing, cooking, and cleaning. Lia then decided to quit school to help her mother support her and her brothers. But once they collected enough money, Lia soon returned back to school to finish her education.
(The rest of her backstory will be told in the prologue.)
MY GOSH THIS IS COOL
I JUST CANNOT WAIT
Or, maybe I can, because of my extreme patience.
But, THIS IS COOL
(and way better than mine hahahaha)
So, have a nice day/night, young Ever/Never!
Ok, from what I’ve read, you may need some work on your personality, flaws, fears, and appearance.
As for your personality:
*You should describe the traits more in detail than just listing them.
For your flaws:
*I believe you should add more flaws.
**Also give more detail into the flaws you list (like the personality traits you listed)
I think more detail in there could help. If you could give Amelia more fears, a couple more (like 2), that would be great!
Appearance: You mainly added her appearance of her ****** features, and her skin tone. If you could give her more detail in other areas, as in her whole self, that would be good as well.
Ok! That’s all I can say. 🙂 Other than this, nice bio!!!