sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    The girls had been kidnapped by never’s

        polabear11 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Try putting that on your comment so you don’t push down any stories.

          sofia2000 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

          K
          It just cut off the end sentence sorry

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    Chapter 6
    It was the night of the ball and they were putting on there beautiful ball gowns. Ella’s one falling gracefully to the ground with white snow flakes falling magically, her hair was curled and hung loosely around her shoulders her makeup was impeccable she looked like a goddess. While Sophie’s hair was raided into a bun with a royal blue…[Read more]

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    Chapter 5

    It was sunset and Ella was walking along through the ever gardens thinking about the ball when I felt a person brush my side I looked over and saw Jame’s, her insides squirmed I blushed. He said “I have this person I want to take to the ball and …” her tummy did a summer salt maybe I was wrong maybe he still wanted to be with Sophie……[Read more]

        sofia2000 replied 1 year, 11 months ago
        xxxxsophiaxxxx replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        This is great! But maybe just watch how you switch perspectives a lot just keep it simple not to confuse your readers. Also a few grammar problems and at times I was confused with who was saying what! But just saying I’m not trying to be mean just some constructive criticism to help you. Hope it has helped but keep on writing!

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    Chapter 4

    Sophie hissed in my ear “dare you to go into the blue forest for an hr”
    Before she spoke I was concentrated, now i couldn’t resist the urge to prove her wrong
    “ fine but only if you come with me”
    “ Deal”
    we sneaked into the forest after class the wind howled in my ears as we walked through the dense forest. Suddenly I heard the sou…[Read more]

        sofia2000 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        My typos are becoming so bad I meant ballgowns

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    Chapter 3:
    I walked into my new dorm and saw one other person she glared at me as I walked to my bed next to the window ” hi I’m sofie and just to let you know James is mine so if you even speak to him he’s you’ll have to deal with me” I calmed my anger who she think she was she couldn’t tell me what to do ” fine but no one tells me what to do I…[Read more]

        xxxxsophiaxxxx replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Great story! But maybe make them a little longer! Anyway keep up the great work!

        cara21 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Nice! Tag me the next chapter please!

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    Chapter 2:
    Ella screamed as she fell into the garden of good she landed softly on her back as some fairies tried to help her get up. She looked around the gardens were blooming with Beth as fairies fluttered around. Evers crowded every where talking to each other as new students popped out of the ground. I had dreamed of this and heard stories but…[Read more]

        sofia2000 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Whoops typo sorry I meant beauty

        xxxxsophiaxxxx replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Please tag me for your next story! I love these chapters!

    sofia2000 posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 1 year, 11 months ago

    It’s been a hundred years since Sofie and Agatha were Chosen at the school for good and Evil I’m desperately hoping I get in to the school for good It sound like a dream come true. Hi I’m Ella an orphan who was discovered years ago, I’m 13 yrs old and this has been my dream since I was 5 tonight was the night I will be chosen that night I lay in…[Read more]

        xxxxsophiaxxxx replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Great story. I heard your knew so let me tell you a bit about this place. That was a great back up story but you need to start by doing a bio. Here is a basic outline of a bio:
        Name:
        Age:
        School:
        Appearance/Clothes:
        Personality:
        Fingerglow:
        Flaws/Weaknesses: (This is VERY IMPORTANT!!!!!! Do not make your character a Mary Sue, which is basically a…[Read more]

        sofia2000 replied 1 year, 11 months ago

        Btw I’m actually 16 in the story whoops

          blobfishdance replied 1 year, 11 months ago

          Great, this is pretty good! Make sure to go over yr chapter once yr done writing it bc u had a few mistakes here and there and u want to make sure that yr readers understand. You could probably finish yr chapter with a hanging, big impact sentence. For example (DO NOT COPY, as it is my own ending) As I plunged down into the darkness, I saw the…[Read more]