spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 7 months ago

    i HAVE STARTED A BUNCH OF CHAPTERS TO MY SECOND BOOK AND I JUST WANTED TO SAY @spitzenvelder
    Chapter 1 ************** A new welcoming

    As I walked into the school for good I saw all the pictures of graduated students, and all the beautiful girls swirling around me in their link pink, purple and green dresses. I watched my finger glow turquoise,…[Read more]

        spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Sorry about that, anyway, Gen is short for Genevieve my evil character

        caramelprincess replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Nice job. πŸ˜‰

          spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 7 months ago

          gee thanks, sorry if its a little ahead πŸ™

        kiko55 replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Nice chapter!! πŸ˜‰

        wenteo replied 4 years, 7 months ago

        Amazing chapters! πŸ™‚

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 13 pt 2 Sorels POV
    All the people who were competing in the trial by tale were given a hankerchief, and told to do anything possible to make their opponent drop theirs. Sophie shot snakes at Alice, who screamed and dropped her hankerchief. David, ran at Grimm with a battle ax, Grimm paniced and dropped his. Freya lulled Slathia to sleep…[Read more]

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Great chapter!

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 13 Sorel’s POV PT.1
    Freya’s eyes twinkled with some dark secret as she swished downstairs, Sorel was a little unerved, because after seeing Freya’s talent, she wasn’t in a hurry to fight her in a battle. Espicialy with the trial by tale coming up, as a 2nd ranked ever, she was garitied a top spot in the trial, and Freya was the 10th.…[Read more]

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool!

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 12 Pt 2 Sorel’s POV Foxy loxy
    A turquoise fox slipped into the clearing, its cunning eyes watched, a pale, thin, pink fox scurried into the clearing.
    “What did you need to tell me?” Sorel asked
    “My sister, Genieve knows I’m here, I need to hurry, David is in danger, and so are you, Genevieve is willing to tip the balance again. Just…[Read more]

        caramelprincess replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool, there are some grammar errors though.

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice!

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Yeah, there are some grammatical errors, but nice otherwise. πŸ™‚

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 12 pt 1 Sorels POV, Snow ***** and no *****
    Sorel was in a duo history with Pr. S. She was sitting next to Freya on her right, the ever side, and Sophie, her new never friend, on the left never side. A light blue rose landed in her lap, Sophie glanced up urgently at her and Sorel carefully pulled it open, in contained 4 words, BLUE…[Read more]

        luna101 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Great chapter!

        caramelprincess replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice but something you could improve on is run-on sentences. You tend to keep your sentences going with lots of commas, don’t be afraid to end them! πŸ™‚

          spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 8 months ago

          Okay πŸ˜€

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice chapter!

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Okay, might as well do Slathia’s bio
    Name: Slathia
    Age: 13
    Gender: F
    School: Evil
    Parent: Frost Queen
    Appearence: Black hair, eyes and lips, deathly pale skin
    Town: Frozen wastes
    Finger glow: Black
    Talent: Freezes anyone, or anything with her cold heart
    Background: Loves cold and hates princesses and loves to see them melt
    Abnormalness: can…[Read more]

        cuteypie1mint replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Its good, maybe a bit more detail?

          kiko55 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

          Nice bio, could use a little bit more detail πŸ˜‰

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Yeah, it could use some more detail, but nice job. πŸ™‚

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 11 pt 2 ???? POV
    Sophie walked into henchman training, Castor was glaring at all the never’s with shingles and or warts. He ordered Beezle to get more honey and lemon to cure it. As Beezle was yelling “Devil dog” as he fell down the stair case, (Castor had punted him down) Sophie saw that there was different colored eggs, each had their…[Read more]

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Interesting, I love it!

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 11 Sophie’s POV Pt. 1
    Evil hall was decorated in the celebration of beheaded princesses and queens, they screamed ghoulishly as villains **** their throats or burned them at the stake. She shuddered and turned to find Genivieves fingers at her throat,
    “Stay away from her, you hear me? Leave her alone you Princess”
    Sophie replied…[Read more]

        spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Oops for the **** I ment ****

          oreliaotter replied 4 years, 8 months ago

          Sometimes this site puts asterisks for perfectly un-***** words like once it put asterisks on ” t e e n agers”

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool!

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool chapter, good job.

          fsa161 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

          Nice!

        caramelprincess replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice chapter.

        wenteo replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice!

        spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        ****, like as in they cut your throat, sorry πŸ™

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    Chapter 11 Cobras
    Sorel slithered around impaitenly, she waited for David to take off his blindfold, as he did he stared at the 2 cobras. The nevergirl, Sophie, hissed flirtatiously. Sorel rolled her eyes, she swayed to an invisible beat and David turned in her direction. He wrapped his arms around her coils and lifted her up,
    “this is the…[Read more]

        fantasygirl12 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Awesome!! πŸ™‚

        caramelprincess replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Quite short once again but you’re getting better with your chapters. πŸ™‚

          spitzenvelder replied 4 years, 8 months ago

          Thanks Caramel

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool, nice work.

    spitzenvelder posted an update in the group RP Level 0: The Clearing 4 years, 8 months ago

    chapter 10 Sorels POV How to survive fairy tales forest group 3
    As Sorel walked to the famed forest group 3, group to Sophie, Agatha and Tedros. Freya chirped
    “bye!!” Sorel watched glumly as she headed off to forest group 5. “Bye” she said to late, then she saw David. Standing with Alice, Reya, Carmin 2 nevergirls she never met, 3 neverboys…[Read more]

        kiko55 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Cool Chapter πŸ™‚

        dot111 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Good job.

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Yeah, it could be a bit longer, but good job. πŸ™‚

        fairytalegirl123 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Yeah, it could be a little longer, but good job. πŸ™‚

        wenteo replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Nice!

        luna101 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        Awesome chapter!

        candypuff567 replied 4 years, 8 months ago

        nice

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