The bony stymph bird screeches and drops me on the Evil side. A splash erupts as my slender body hits the surface of the sludge moat. As I come up for air, gasping, my trunk slams beside me and litters my face with muck.
I paddle to my trunk and drag it along…[Read more]
I pour the bubbly green substance in with the aqua gel in my beaker, a small gray fire leaking green smoke. I blow the flame out and pour my thick turquoise liquid into a small stone bowl. I peel some tadpole-sized eels from Mother’s bowl into my stone bowl and smash them with my mashing stick. I pour the dark teal mixture into my mouth, feeling…[Read more]
BTW the face in the mirror is not Mira. It’s the Evil Queen’s mirror on the wall, like when she asked who was the prettiest of them all.
Wow, this is really well written and I love all of the adjectives. You’re really talented! One thing, however, is that you say ‘my hands regaining their willowy form’ and in the next sentence, it says ‘my shoulders regain their Queenly form.’ which repeats, so for the second time, you could use restore and shape so it would be ‘my hands regaining…[Read more]
Thanks! That is a well-thought out comment, and I’m usually good at those types of things, but I guess I missed one. Do you want to be tagged?
Personality: Cunning, flaunting, direct, determined,
Parentage/Lineage: Evil Queen and an unknown vampire
Appearance: Flawless pale skin, button nose, violet eyes, sculpted purple lips, long fringy eyelashes, slender form
Fingerglow: Velvety purple
Talent: Can digest any poison…[Read more]
BTW the girl in the red cloak is one of my friends’ stories, @Veivei2009!