My Ranking Points
Hi people, this is my first time posting a chapter is I’m nervous and excited to see what you think. Anyway, it’s from the point of view of a girl named Helen and it’s about what would happen if Aric went to the School for Evil (Not Boys). Hope you like it!
I looked around after sliding into my seat, no one had seen me walking to class.
Of course they didn’t. I scolded myself. Nobody ever notices me.
All of the students in the School for Good and Evil couldn’t see me. Ok, they could, I just blend in well. I’m one of those girls who is seen but not seen. Even though I’m the top scoring student at the School for Evil.
But still, my classmates don’t acknowledge me. Well, except for Aric. Once or twice every day he’ll my way. Every time he does, I look away, as to not make eye contact-who knows what that boy is thinking? He’s the second best Never but I doubt he knows it, he probably sees himself on the top like everyone else. Because just like people have trouble focusing on me, they also have trouble focusing on my name.
Lost in my trace, I realized I was staring at him. I tried to look away before he turned his head, but it was to late. He had seen me. I could feel electricity vibrating through his deep violet eyes and into my celestial blue ones. I could read his mind for that split second. I heard his thoughts, evil thoughts, just like mine. But then I remembered something, when I’m, connected in a moment like this, where I could read Aric’s thoughts, he could also read mine!
I gasped and tore my eyes away, surprised at what I had seen. Aric had a weakness! I couldn’t tell what it was, it was locked tightly in the deepest depths of his brain, but I still knew it was there. And I had to know what it was.
At the end of class I leapt out of my chair and raced out of the room.
Aric grabbed my arm when I past him. I was scared, he looked mad, and Aric rarely ever looks mad. He’s usually calm and collected but intimidating nonetheless, “We need to talk and you know it.” He growled at me.
“I do what I want and in my mind it has nothing to do with you.” I told him, yanking my arm away, I broke his little finger knowing he could heal it easily, and I sprinted down the hall.
I climbed the stairs to balcony of the Mischief tower and I thought back to the day’s events. Aric was evil, like me. He was smart, like me. And he was fast, like me. In other words, he’s my mirror image, and he would expect anything I tried. So if I wanted to find out what his weakness was I couldn’t do it as me.
I gazed across the Endless Woods my midnight black hair blowing in the wind, thankful for my snakeskin cloak. I don’t know of anyone else in the school who can see through invisibility cloaks but me, so I thought I was fine.
Until, I heard the door open. I spun around seeing Aric step out onto the balcony, twenty feet away. I held my breath, knowing he couldn’t see me.
“Well, well, well. I didn’t expect to find you here, Helen.” He said, his smirk seeming to say, Oh I totally did.
How can he see me? I pulled back the hood of my cloak unsure of what to do. “Why are you here?” I asked.
“I think you know.” He retorted.
“I don’t.” I replied, backing towards the flat stone railing.
“Mind Reader,” he spat taking a step closer.
“Everyone has a ***** in their armor, Aric. Not just you.”
He threw a spell at me in rage but I ducked and aimed one at him. He tried petrification, paralyzation, and one feeble attempt at uglification but every time I either dogeded or reflected his spells back at him. Finally, he chucked his dagger at me. Surprised by his quick change in tactic I lost my balance and it hit its mark. Directly through the center of my thigh pinning me against the stone. I would have screamed in pain but I was wearing my favorite bracelet,a simple silver chain, which prevented me from feeling pain and it healed my wounds. Unfortunately, the dagger was stuck through my leg and if I moved to pull it out it might cut a bone beyond repair. So I stayed put, watching for Aric’s next move.
He stared at me as he stalked over, “Why aren’t you crying yet?”
“In case you haven’t noticed, I’m not like other girls. I’m scored higher than you. You’re not top Never, you’re second. You’re going to have to try harder if you actually want to hurt me.” I snapped at him.
His eyes flew to the chain on my hand. I tried to hide it behind my back but I was pinned against the wall so I couldn’t. He ripped it off my wrist and I winced in pain.
“No! If I don’t wear that it’s never going to heal!”
“There are other ways to heal it. Plus, I just wanted to do this…” He yanked the dagger out of my leg, I howled in pain as I crumpled to the ground.
“Much better.” Aric said pleased with my scream. He dropped my bracelet next to me, “Just because I’ll probably get expelled for maiming another student.”
I scrambled to put it back on, “You’re going to pay for this.” I could feel the bracelet get to work. Luckley, since it was only off of me for a couple seconds the **** in my leg would heal, it would just take a lot longer.
I used the railing to pull myself up but the second I let go of it I fell.
Onto Aric. Pushing off his well built chest I fell backward.
“Somebody’s having a hard time.” He said while watching me with an amused expression.
“We even?” I asked.
After what Aric had done I wasn’t going to take no for an answer. He could see that which is probably why he ignored my question and said, “You won’t be able to get back to your room by yourself.” Tossing me over his shoulder.
I tried to flip myself off Aric but he held tight. I started to pound on his back but he just jabbed the painful point in my back, a place only I knew about, the one place that my bracelet couldn’t keep pain from.
“Shut up, you’re going to get us both caught after curfew.” He hissed at me.
“Since when did you care about that? You’re just looking for an excuse to yell at me!”
“I told you to be quiet!”
When we got to the girls hall Aric asked me, “Which room?”
“None of them.”
“Now isn’t the time for that.” He replied, setting me down but still holding me, like I could somehow run away.
“What? Do you have other things to do? Maybe cutting open the legs of all your other enemies?”
“Which room?” He said more forcefully.
“I said, none of them!”
He put his ****** dagger to my back.
“I’m telling the truth!” I said, Aric and I both knowing if he cut my back my bracelet couldn’t do anything about it. He lowered his weapon, seeing the truth in my eyes.
“I was allowed to have a different room than anybody else.” I explained, “The school moves it around so only I can find it. It’s always in the same spot if I walk there but since it’s magic I could do something like jump of the balcony-which, now that I think of it I should and would have done-and a slide would catch me, bringing me back to my room. Oh, and, it only allows people who I trust or gave permission to come in. And I bet you can guess, you’re neither of those. Now leave.”
“No, you’re to take me to your room.” He said pointing his dagger at my back again.
My breath caught, “I’m not afraid of you.”
“Yes you are,” he smirked. “Only fools tell themselves their not afraid of anything. And you’re no fool.”
“Why can’t you leave me alone?”
“You know why.”
“That doesn’t mean I have to accept it.” I said before twisting out of his grasp. I jumped through the wall and appeared in my room.
Very well-written. I hope Aric has a cool power? (Because his lack of powers bothered me, ESPECIALLY considering who his mother was). AND when Helen stared at Aric, I was like Baloo: “Forget about those, they’re nothing but trouble.” LOL (Let’s agree that Aric is sign of trouble)
Aric’s? Considering his personality, it would have to be something under those categories:
– Something that can be used for attack, like bending fire.
– Something that messes up with people’s minds, like creating illusions or manipulating them.
Though I find fire bending more suitable for Aric’s impulsive personality and rage fits, having the power of manipulating people’s dreams and walking on them would walk quite well with his cold, manipulative side.
It might take a while for me to write the next chapter; that one took about 2 days. (I worked on it in my spare time.)
Aric could also have both, though. But then you would have to pick one to be the one that manifests itself stronger, overshadowing the other, to prevent making a Mary-Sue. Maybe you could give him both fire-bending and dream-manipulating, but he can’t quite control the secone one: it is sponteneous? Hope my hints helped.
Because for some reason, the site read it as a inappropriate word.