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I woke up very happy and found my roommate up and brushing her hair.
“Hi, you must be my roommate.” I said while walking over to my own vanity mirror.
“Oh, you surprised me, my name is Tera.” She said
“Nice to meet you, I’m Clara.” I said to her.
“I guess we’re going to be roommates for the next four…[Read more]
these are the characters that I will be adding to my story, please comment below
age: 14 almost 15
personality: Can be shy at times and likes being with nature rather than people. She also has a way of bringing other peoples hopes up even if she if feeling down.
appearance: Has light…[Read more]
you can read Clara and Nickolice Frost-blumes along with my characters from rp level 0’s stories hear
Susans story chapter 11: Just another day
As usual my teacher gave me top rank in beautification. During etiquette we where learning how to dance at a ball, I remembered how I would dance at the ***** that my parents would throw at our castle. All of the fancy dances that we learned where easy and I was able to help some of my class mates when…[Read more]
Cool but I didn’t really see any plot in this chapter, plus it was pretty short and had some misuses of grammar. Other than that it was fine. 😉
nick’s story chapter 11: just another day
I wasn’t paying atenshion to the teacher in chivalry class. I wasn’t in the mood for learning how to fight or learn about how to save a person. The challenge was to fight with a wepion that you don’t use often, I chose to use a axe to fight with. I got a third ranking in the class, for the rest of the day…[Read more]
Ok, good job. Next time could make it longer and fix up some spelling mistakes. (Don’t take this offensively.)
Mistakes like weapon not wepion and worrying not worring and attention instead of atenshion. Anyway, cool chapter. 🙂
Just fix some grammar mistakes and then you’ll be good. Good job though. 😉
I nead 1 ever and 1 never to be a room mate for my characters
chapter 3: first day
I found my room and I waited until we had to go the assembly. I had some flowers grow on my bed and a snow curtain to hang over my bed so I could feel at home. I got my bags open and unpacked my things. When I had to go to the asimbly I remembered to put my…[Read more]
. @LIZZIE191234 and @PEPPY you are in the chapter
Susan’s story chapter 10: new friends
I walked into the dorm and found my room mates already inside.
“You seam tired,” Piper said
“Have you heard of what happened at one of the surviving fairy tales classes?” Juliet asked
“I was in that class,” I said,”My friends and I are trying to find out what…[Read more]
nick’s story chapter 10: meeting the next evil queen
After I was done washing my uniform I went back outside to think. I wasn’t tiered so I felt like I didn’t nead to go to bed early. All of the animals in the blue forest seamed to be scared that night. I heard low growling and then I saw it, a monster right in front of me. I was tiered of my…[Read more]
chapter 2: the arrival
I waited for my the flower ground to arrive, when it did I was pulled into the ground and was pulled into the ground and onto the line. While I was going towards the school for good I noticed that plants where growing out on to the surface, I new that my powers would get out of control. when I got to the school I felt…[Read more]
Susan’s story chapter 9: a home away from home
I walked into the my beatification class and found make up produces at my desk. I waited for the rest of the class to come in and listened to the teacher.
“Today you will learn how to aply makeup properly while making it look suddle,” she told us,”first you will apply the blush so that it looks like…[Read more]
Nick’s story chapter 9: a normal day
After my walk I got my uniform on and read until I had to go to class. I was in history of heroism when I noticed that my hand looked like it does when I am in my wolf form. I just payed attention in class and acted like nothing happened. I walked outside with the rest of my class and got my lunch and found a…[Read more]
Okay so here were some of the grammar mistakes you made (btw this is not to be rude or mean just to help you improve grammar wise)
Wrong not rong.
Tired instead of tiered
Lying not ling
Seen not sean
Yelled not yeld
Angry instead of angy
Needed in place of neaded
And dirt not duret
Other than those few grammar mistakes the chapter was okay. Good job. 😉