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Nick’s story chapter 9: a normal day
After my walk I got my uniform on and read until I had to go to class. I was in history of heroism when I noticed that my hand looked like it does when I am in my wolf form. I just payed attention in class and acted like nothing happened. I walked outside with the rest of my class and got my lunch and found a place to sit.
“Whats rong with you.” a voice said behind me, it was Linkion
“Nothing, just tiered.” I answered
“Where brothers, I know when you are ling.” he said
“Its nothing, my hand just turned wolf in class.” I said,” Its not like I turned completely wolf in class.”
“You shouldn’t take a walk late at night. Someone could have sean you.” He said
“The same thing goes for you. At least I can control my transformation.” I yeld back
“What ever,” he said to me before walking off. I was tired of my family telling me how to transform and what I should do. I did my best not to get angy at my brother during class. surviving fairy tales was a normal class and after the class I noticed that my uniform neaded a wash because it had duret and plants all over me. It felt nice that nothing strange happened today.
Okay so here were some of the grammar mistakes you made (btw this is not to be rude or mean just to help you improve grammar wise)
Wrong not rong.
Tired instead of tiered
Lying not ling
Seen not sean
Yelled not yeld
Angry instead of angy
Needed in place of neaded
And dirt not duret
Other than those few grammar mistakes the chapter was okay. Good job. 😉