My Ranking Points
nick’s story chapter 11: just another day
I wasn’t paying atenshion to the teacher in chivalry class. I wasn’t in the mood for learning how to fight or learn about how to save a person. The challenge was to fight with a wepion that you don’t use often, I chose to use a axe to fight with. I got a third ranking in the class, for the rest of the day I tried to pay attention but I was still thinking about what happened the other night. At lunch I found a place with a lot of trees to eat. I needed to have some time to my own today and being in the forest would help me.
“Whats wrong?” a kind voice said behind me, I turned around and saw that it was Susan.
“Nothing I just was thinking about what happened last night,” I answered
“What happened last night,” she asked
“I ran into the next evil queen,” I said, she looked confused so I added,”She’s the granddaughter of the evil queen,”
“Thats worring,” she said, before we had to get to class.
Ok, good job. Next time could make it longer and fix up some spelling mistakes. (Don’t take this offensively.)
Mistakes like weapon not wepion and worrying not worring and attention instead of atenshion. Anyway, cool chapter. 🙂
Just fix some grammar mistakes and then you’ll be good. Good job though. 😉