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So here is my chapter. Hope you like it.
Chapter 1: The School for Good and Evil
“Hey Yel! Let’s go! We need to be prepared for the School Master!”
I nodded and stared at myself in the mirror, the black hair going out. I’ve tried so many times to dye it but it goes black again the next morning. I just sighed and went with Sophie to Agatha’s house.
Sophie and I were best friends and step-sisters. Agatha and I, however, was just friends. I was always weirded out in her looks, her attitude and whatever. But I always hide it in my smiles and keep my thoughts to myself.
I find myself being kidnapped along with Sophie who seems to be smiling. Then, I saw Agatha running to save her.
“Agatha, stop!” I shouted, but she didn’t listen.
Suddenly, we were trapped by trees and thorns.
“WHAT WERE YOU DOING??!!” I shouted. Then Sophie started shoving Agatha but keeping a hold on the shadow that was kidnapping us.
“YOU’RE RUINING EVERYTHING!!!” Sophie screamed. Then, the shadow suddenly disappeared and we all fell from the ground.
I haven’t have enough time to scream. I was terrified for a bit as we were tumbling down, not seeing anything. Finally, we stopped.
I opened my eyes first, not caring about Sophie and Agatha’s complaining for once and saw the view.
We were being carried by a bird and flying above the School for Good and Evil.
So the stories were true after all.
I watched as Sophie kept dreaming about going to the School of Good. I can’t help but imagine about it too until, Agatha fell down to the School of Good.
“NO!” Me and Sophie shouted. We were being dragged to the School of Evil and fell down.
“THERE MUST BE SOME MISTAKE!!!!!” We shouted as we were plummeting to our death.
Then, we fell down into a moat, followed by more birds and children falling. We swam our way to shore and saw a line and we followed them. I was terrified. Then my worst fear and nightmares will happen here.
THE SCHOOL OF EVIL EDIFICATION AND PROPAGATION OF SIN
Yup, I’m sure of it.
Nice Chapter! I like that you made your character friends with Sophie and Agatha. There were a few grammatical errors, but it was still great nonetheless. 🙂